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The Obliging Wardrobe
by Rabid1st
A bit of original fiction
Rating: E for Everyone
Beta Babe: [livejournal.com profile] keswindhover
Summary: This is something of a humor infused fairy-tale.

On a balmy evening in late summer, Belinda Collins, age 5, was eaten by a Lesser Horned Bandersnatch. The snapping, salivating horror burst out of an old wardrobe and devoured every scrap of her, right down to the illuminated patches on her Tinkerbell pajamas. A tragedy, of course, but it wasn’t an entirely unexpected occurrence. Belinda had, in fact, been expecting the monster (and dreading her demise) ever since her family had moved in to their creepy new home on Grimshaw Lane. The wardrobe had simply obliged.

Belinda’s sister, Becca, age 7, saw it happen. A sensible child, she hadn’t been expecting a monster to leap out of the wardrobe, and so she had survived to tell the tale. She tried in vain to explain what she’d witnessed, first to her parents, and then to the police, and finally, inevitably, to a series of psychiatrists. Nobody would listen or believe. Previously regarded as quite promising by her parents, Becca became a source of embarrassment to them, even as the missing Belinda became sanctified in memory.

Her father thought it might be best to move away from the house that had brought them so much grief, but Becca’s mother wouldn't hear of it. She hoped for the return of her vanished angel.

“What if she comes home and we aren’t here?”

“She’s never coming home,” Becca said, exasperation sharpening her tone. “She’s been eaten.”

“Take your medicine,” her father said. “And stop upsetting your mother.”

Becca took her medicine and, eventually, stopped telling her upsetting tale. She kept to her room, for the most part, keeping an eye on the obliging wardrobe. With daily practice, she schooled her mind to always expect the best. Clean sheets. Pretty dresses. Fluffy kittens. Satchels of cash.

By the time her parents died, Becca was as much a fixture in the Grimshaw Lane house as the wardrobe. She grew quite set in her ways. And if those ways were strange, the townspeople made allowances. Though they worried about her from time to time and wondered if something ought to be done about her weird and isolating lifestyle. Becca remained relentlessly untroubled by the expectations of others. She lived simply with half a dozen fluffy cats. Her life wasn't lonely from her perspective. She belonged to a book group, regularly attended church and kept a prize-winning garden. She never wanted for anything. The wardrobe always provided.

Until, one day on the far side of eighty-five, Becca thought she heard her sister calling to her. She went upstairs to her bedroom and pressed an ear against the wardrobe door. Surely, that was Belinda’s voice, she thought. And just for a second, before she opened the door, she had the slightest expectation of visiting her sister in heaven.

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“Vanished,” Officer Ted Taylor said, while searching the Grimshaw Lane house later that month. “Just like her sister.”

“People don’t vanish, Ted,” Louisa Garza, his long suffering partner, countered. “She’s dropped dead somewhere. Her mind was starting to go, you know.”

Garza could smell something rotten, figuratively and quite literally, in the musty old home. She followed her nose up the stairs, dreading what she might find. There was sure to be a decomposing body up there, beside the bed or in the bath. She pushed open doors one after another, peering into rooms and closets, until she reached the obliging wardrobe. The stench of death nearly overwhelmed her as she moved closer to it.

Garza hated this part of her job. She knew exactly what she would see when she opened the wardrobe. Old lady Collins would be long dead, curled up in that tiny space. The poor, poor woman, trapped and dying alone, Garza thought as she reached a hand toward the door. But before she could turn the latch, one of Becca Collin’s abandoned cats leaped down on her. Louisa Garza reeled backward, catching the cat, but losing her balance. Her heel tangled in a throw rug. She gave a small yelp as she staggered to one side.

“You all right there?” Ted asked, laughing as he came into the room.

“Stupid cat,” Garza snarled.

Gently dropping the tabby to the floor, she straightened to see Ted reaching for the wardrobe handle. Before she could formulate a proper expectation of what was to come, he’d opened the door. The scent of decay evaporated in a puff of lavender and vanilla spice.

“Just as I thought,” Ted said, staring into the bare cupboard, “bupkis.

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Date: 2011-12-07 05:18 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] lea724.livejournal.com
I like this! Do you think you'll write more?

“She’s never coming home,” Becca said, exasperation sharpening her tone. “She’s been eaten.”

“Take your medicine,” her father said. “And stop upsetting your mother.”


That's my favorite part. :)

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Date: 2011-12-07 05:22 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] rabid1st.livejournal.com
I don't know if I will write more about Becca. Did you like her? Original fiction is what I hope to have published.

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Date: 2011-12-08 01:09 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] basric.livejournal.com
Loved it. Don't envy the next family to buy the house from the estate.

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Date: 2011-12-08 03:38 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] rabid1st.livejournal.com
Thank you. Yes, someone is in for a nasty...or happy...surprise. Maybe they will only expect linens and clothes in the wardrobe.

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Date: 2011-12-08 03:21 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] susanb03.livejournal.com
That's awesome :)

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Date: 2011-12-08 03:23 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] rabid1st.livejournal.com
Thank you so much. Glad you liked it.

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Date: 2011-12-08 06:56 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] whipchick.livejournal.com
FUCKING AWESOME. I think this is one of the very best entries I've read in LJIdol so far, and definitely one of my very favorites! Fun, funny, well-crafted, great voice, and has a sense of humor about itself. Terrific job setting up the rules of the world, and making the pay-off of the story be the absolute logical extension of them while also being totally surprising and rewarding! Great job, really great!

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Date: 2011-12-08 07:18 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] rabid1st.livejournal.com
Wow! Thank you so much. You might have just saved this story's life. My loved ones prefer the rough draft version, rather than this more flippant and verbose one. Though, I wanted to convey the feeling of a cheeky fairy-tale. Which seemed to have come over for you as you mention the story having a sense of humor about itself.

But still, given the lack of comments, I was just about to switch out this one for the rough draft when your comment came to my email. I hate to second guess myself, but I also will acknowledge that I do tend to ramble on and make things more complex, rather than simplifying them. For example: the original opening line was...

Belinda Collins, age 5, was eaten by a monster.

My loved ones call the stage dressing I added for this version, "explaining too much!" Perhaps there is a lesson in here about showing people my rough drafts. LOL Anyway, respecting your work as I do, I am tickled that you enjoyed this story in all its flippant glory.

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Date: 2011-12-08 10:31 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] keswindhover.livejournal.com
Ah, to get what we expect and not what we deserve....

I enjoyed this very much - it fits its length very well - not too much and not too little, and it has the pay off in the lastline, which is always a bonus.

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Date: 2011-12-09 12:38 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] rabid1st.livejournal.com
Thank you, Kes. I always appreciate the feedback you give me. Though, I don't always take your advice. :grin:

Having seen the rough draft, do you believe that I have improved upon it? Or did I simply muddle it up with my additional details? I know that you often encourage me to add details about place or to answer questions that the reader might have...but you didn't urge me to do that this time. Did I gild the lily? Jan was disappointed in this version. He said it didn't hold his attention like the original draft.

Rae

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Date: 2011-12-09 03:45 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] sarcasmoqueen.livejournal.com
this reminds me off a childhood tale that I read, the name of which is currently escaping me, unfortunately. Did you by chance get your inspiration from it? If so, can you remind me of the name of the story?

Nicely told, in either cae. I enjoyed it very much!

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Date: 2011-12-09 05:40 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] rabid1st.livejournal.com
Well, I was reading a book called Dealing with Dragons and the phrase, "The Obliging Wardrobe" is in the book. I'm not sure if that wardrobe is anything like the one I have here, or not, as I haven't gotten that far in the book. But, it did provide new dresses for the protagonist. And it occurred to me that a wardrobe that provided whatever you were looking for could present quite a problem for small children.

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Date: 2011-12-09 03:47 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] maniacalshen.livejournal.com
I like this! It's quirky and neat.

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Date: 2011-12-09 05:41 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] rabid1st.livejournal.com
Thanks, Shen. I'm glad you enjoyed it.

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Date: 2011-12-09 11:58 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] lapis-lazuli615.livejournal.com
I love this story. The obliging wardrobe gives you whatever you expet for it! Awesome!

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Date: 2011-12-09 03:44 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] rabid1st.livejournal.com
Yes! The idea was sparked by a throw away line in a children's novel and I immediately saw the horror behind a wardrobe that would give you anything your were expecting. After all, some people always expect the worst.

I'm glad that you loved the story. Thanks for taking the time to comment.

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Date: 2011-12-09 06:36 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] noodledays.livejournal.com
oooh, very interesting! I'm wondering which was the olfactory hallucination. :o

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Date: 2011-12-09 06:45 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] rabid1st.livejournal.com
I suppose it is up to the reader to pick a reality for themselves. I feel both of the scents were illusions, reflecting the process within the wardrobe. Once the door is opened, though, it becomes reality. Rather like the cat is both alive and dead until you open the box. So, Becca went to heaven to visit her sister and her disappearance is now a mystery. So, she's not just an addled old lady, now, but only because Ted believes in such mysteries.

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Date: 2011-12-09 07:09 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] blythe025.livejournal.com
Nice -- by which I mean well written and dark -- little fairy tale. :)

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Date: 2011-12-10 12:08 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] rabid1st.livejournal.com
Coming from you I take that is the highest praise. Thank you very much.

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Date: 2011-12-09 10:46 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] muchtooarrogant.livejournal.com
The Obliging Wardrobe, I love it! And, after all, you can't blame it. It only delivers what people expect!

Great entry!

Dan

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Date: 2011-12-10 12:09 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] rabid1st.livejournal.com
Yep! It isn't doing anything sinister, unless you are expecting the worst. Thanks. I'm glad you liked the story, Dan.

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Date: 2011-12-09 11:46 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] shimmerdream.livejournal.com
A twisted yet funny fairytale. I love it. I'd like to find out more about the wardrobe, and what else it has delivered in its history.

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Date: 2011-12-10 12:13 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] rabid1st.livejournal.com
I was telling someone else that for the most part it probably just delivered empty cupboards to fill and/or the clothes or linens put into it. Since most people expect to get out exactly what they put in to a wardrobe, few people would get nasty surprises. But I can see it giving you things that you thought were lost. And, of course, the lovely bit about Becca is that she schooled herself to expect great things of the wardrobe.

I'm happy that you loved the story and found it funny, if twisted. Thank you so much.

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Date: 2011-12-10 02:53 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] magenta-girl.livejournal.com
Loved this!

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Date: 2011-12-10 02:56 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] rabid1st.livejournal.com
Thank you. That means a lot.

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Date: 2011-12-10 03:30 am (UTC)
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From: [personal profile] glory_jean
Ooh! Old school dark fairy tale. Nice. I could see this being the premise for one of those dark kiddie series they are producing these days.

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Date: 2011-12-10 04:45 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] rabid1st.livejournal.com
Thank you very much. I was thinking about something along those lines. That's why it is slightly irreverent.

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Date: 2011-12-10 05:39 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] rt-sparrow.livejournal.com
I love this so much. It's a fairy tale and a parable. It's delightful.

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Date: 2011-12-10 06:56 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] rabid1st.livejournal.com
Thank you. I really appreciate that you liked it for its duality.

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Date: 2011-12-10 03:58 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] java-fiend.livejournal.com
Really, really well done. I love the characters, the tone and voice of this piece. You did a fantastic job here.

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Date: 2011-12-11 05:42 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] rabid1st.livejournal.com
Thank you so much. I'm blushing with pleasure over here. And not only because your Santa's Evil Twin icon is making me feel I've been naughty.

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Date: 2011-12-10 04:37 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] bewize.livejournal.com
This was fantastic. I really enjoyed the way you played with expectations and results.

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Date: 2011-12-11 05:41 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] rabid1st.livejournal.com
Thank you. That is exactly what I was hoping for in the reader. I wanted you to think a little about different expectations leading to different results. So, you have made me quite happy with this comment.

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Date: 2011-12-10 05:33 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] theafaye.livejournal.com
I'm really intrigued by the pared down version, because I think you pitched this one just right, so I can't imagine how simpler would have been better.

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Date: 2011-12-11 05:39 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] rabid1st.livejournal.com
I shared it with a few other people and they didn't find it to be too overworked in the final analysis. I think it might be the refreshing simplicity of the original that worked for my loved ones. My beta, Kes, says above that she too liked the original. I did take out a few lines after the discussion with [livejournal.com profile] whipchick because they were the lines where I felt I had over explained. I think the rest of it works.

And I am very happy to hear that it worked for you. I, personally, feel that "Lesser horned Bandersnatch" is better than "monster." But I do wonder if, for example, I needed the establishment of setting that you get from "On a balmy evening in midsummer"...? These are the decisions that try a writer, I suppose. But I stand by setting the stage, because I did feel the stark demise of young Belinda Collins, age 5, eaten by a monster, was a bit off-putting in the rough draft.

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Date: 2011-12-10 08:30 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] emo-snal.livejournal.com
This is excellent (:

But the parents never searched the wardrobe for their missing daughter? Surely they'd find her there? Or maybe she didn't want to be found and so the wardrobe would be disobliging her? AAAh ::brain explodes::

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Date: 2011-12-11 01:29 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] rabid1st.livejournal.com
They expected she'd been stolen away in the night by a predator, so they didn't expect to find her in the wardrobe. I thought about adding a line reflecting that, but as you might note from other comments, I'm already in trouble with my rough draft readers for "explaining too much."

So, best to just assume that they were not expecting to find her in the wardrobe. If the had expected that...then...they might well have found her there. Though hopefully not digested. EEewww! :GRIN:

Thanks for the comments. Sorry to have exploded your brain.

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Date: 2011-12-10 09:37 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] myrna-bird.livejournal.com
The wardrobe made me think of the Chronicles of Narnia: The Lion the Witch and the Wardrobe, but your story is very different, of course. I liked it.

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Date: 2011-12-11 01:31 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] rabid1st.livejournal.com
I thought of that wardrobe a bit, as well. But luckily nothing horrid ever came out of it. Still, wardrobes are creepy things on some level, I guess.

Glad you liked the story.

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Date: 2011-12-11 01:30 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] rabid1st.livejournal.com
Awwww! Thank you!

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Date: 2011-12-11 09:12 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] liret.livejournal.com
I like Becca's matter-of-fact attitude about the whole thing.

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Date: 2011-12-11 06:43 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] rabid1st.livejournal.com
I'm glad to hear you liked Becca. I liked her, too, I thought that she might have a far more fulfilling life than her neighbors imagined. Because there is nothing to say that the wardrobe didn't provide company when she wanted it as well as money and clothing and food and whatever. Becca, being a sensible person, was part of the magic of the story, in my mind. So, I'm glad to see her come across like that for you. Thank you.

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Date: 2011-12-11 02:35 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] malinaldarose.livejournal.com
I love this!

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Date: 2011-12-11 06:39 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] rabid1st.livejournal.com
I'm happy to hear that. Thank you.

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Date: 2011-12-11 03:02 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] mstrobel.livejournal.com
Ooh, I loved this :D

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Date: 2011-12-11 06:39 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] rabid1st.livejournal.com
Thank you so much. I'm glad to hear it.

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Date: 2011-12-11 05:05 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] jem0000000.livejournal.com
Wonderful! I love this.

Becca really had the right idea with that wardrobe, too. :)

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Date: 2011-12-11 06:38 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] rabid1st.livejournal.com
Yes! Becca, despite living alone, had everything she needed or expected from life. I tend to think of her as someone who was a lot better off emotionally than her neighbors suspected.

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