This Just IN...I suck at personal POV

[rabid1st]

I know...I know...you are all waiting for Disheveled. And Wild Geese was supposed to be ready quickly. The good news is I have about 10 pages. The bad news is...I suck at anything but Omni POV.

You may have noticed that Part 1 of Wild Geese is from the Doctor's POV...and it's a short fic...maybe 25 pages total. So, it should ALL be in the Doctor's POV. But...I've worked for days on Part 2 and I still can't get him to actually HAVE sex with Rose. He's dancing around it. And he's being diffident about what the sex is like, too.

Not Rose though...Rose is talking. So, I'm going to try Part 2 from her POV and see if I get them any closer to the bedroom. Sorry about the delay of...well...everything. If this doesn't work out this weekend. I'm back to the Disheveled finale on Tuesday.

Rae

Comments

[np-complete.livejournal.com]

You can do it ... even if it's from Rose's POV. I have faith in you!

I have to admit, the idea of the Doctor continuing to dither and be vague sounds highly amusing, if frustrating for both of them. It's probably best for both of them if they work it out.

Characters can be so frustrating, sometimes!

[nyaaaaaauuuuuuu.livejournal.com]

This is a patented Vote of Confidence. ;)

Take a break, pamper yourself a bit, and then see if Rose and the Doctor'll start doing as well as talking.

Real life has been kicking my creative butt recently...and sapping all my energy...so anytime I try to write something it just fizzles out. But I think when some of the stress goes away my ideas will come back...

So, yeah: my advice is good food & relaxation. Good luck!

[slvrcrystalc.livejournal.com]

I don't mind you switching POV's, really!

Maybe after you write Rose's POV you can then do the Doctors POV for the same scenes. I'd love it if you posted both, too. I loved the one multi-pov fic that I've read, and if it stretches out this lovely piece of writing, then I'm all for it.

[roxyk630.livejournal.com]

God! He's horrible about that isn't he!

Rose could always club him and drag him in the bedroom. Not only is it aggressive... it gets him to stop the banter... and... nm cracky idea.

Either way, I'm looking forward to both! Take your time. ;) I'll wait patiently for Raefic. :3

[sensiblecat.livejournal.com]

Oh, go with Rose. I would love to hear you write her. And that kind of behaviour sounds utterly in character for Ten.

[rabid1st.livejournal.com]

Yes, Rose is talking. Or basically panicking as much as he did in the first part. So, I probably will go with her. Plus, for the alien sex...it is probably better to get a human POV on it first. My human audience is going to have a hard enough time understanding the mechanics of it without having it all be from the alien's perspective. I mean, it IS perfectly normal to him so he's not going to go into detail like Rose would.

Rae

[measi.livejournal.com]

Honestly, I think as long as your chapters are in a specific POV, switching between them is just fine. It's those within a scene POV changes that are jarring. :)

[rabid1st.livejournal.com]

Yeah...I know it is acceptable. But it would be better in a piece this short if I could have kept the Doctor's POV.

And if I had mad fixed POV skills I could do it, I think. But, given my skill level, I don't feel it is a good idea to have the alien describe the alien sex. The Doctor in my head is just not very good at putting things in human terms while still keeping in voice.

And you know the Doctor...it's not going to do much for the mood if he starts babbling on about how his biology works. He'll just get technical and silly...which is funny but doesn't move the story forward into heated passion.

Rose will sort of need to move us to the action sequence here. And doing it remotely...well...it left the Doctor a little incoherent. Again, not really good for conveying what is actually happening to the reader. My alien sex is alien and walks the squick line and so I think really needs to be sweetened by the idea that ROSE is enjoying it.

Rae

[measi.livejournal.com]

*nods*

Well, here's a suggestion - write it in Rose's POV so you have all of the plot references/dialogue written.

Then go back and try to switch it around. React to your Rose POV draft *as the Doctor*, and rewrite it.

Might help to maintain that POV. :)

[rabid1st.livejournal.com]

This is what's happening...only it's happening the other way around. I have it written as Doctor POV and I'm switching it into Rose's POV. The only question is do I want to layer it. There are a few things I like about his POV...bits about how she looks and feels to him. And why he does certain things...but I think I might just have him over explain...and be sushed by her as appropriate.

I will look at it and see if I could make it his POV again...but I think it is crying out to be Rose...so I'm just going to let it.

Thanks for your pep-talk.

Rae

[rjrog77.livejournal.com]

I envy you that you can write in Rose POV.

I'm pretty much useless at anyone but Ten (but since I get him jabbering on at me so much I guess that might be why).

[myemmie.livejournal.com]

I can see the hesitancy about switching POV, but I agree that I think it might be better as a reader to have it be Rose's. And then I'd love love love to get an alt!Ten!version as a cookie. :DDD

We get more Raefic and you wouldn't have to fuss about which POV you like better...everyone lives wins!